really it is good paragraphs and easy to understand
Apr 21, 2015
good essay - Reducing the Working Week Essay by: Anonymous
Your essay is grammatically very good. But there is no linking sentences between the paragraphs. Also you had concluded the essay in the second paragraph which should not be done.
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