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Task 2: Use of Leisure Time

by Phuong Nhung Nguyen
(Hanoi, Vietnam)

Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles.
Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.

Discuss two views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, with busy lifestyles, there is little time for people to entertain. Therefore, selecting what to do in spare time is fairly prime. Some suggest that it is better to do activities boasting the mind like reading and solving word puzzles. Whereas in contrast, others want to relax their brain completely in leisure time. Before giving my opinion, I will discuss both sides of view.

First of all, doing mental activities is beneficial. When we read or play puzzles, our brain still work at lower capacity in comparison with normal status. It means that the mind in leisure and working time is not much significantly different. Hence, we can remain our adaptation to working pressure despite of the fact that we are free quite a while.

Nevertheless, a great number of people long for their brain to relax thoroughly. In weekdays, they spend eight hours per day to work and the pressure of job makes them exhausted. They are bored with mental activities as their brain are stimulated continuously for job so they need something which is really discrepant even contrast.

From personal thesis, I think that no way outstrips other due to two ways are appropriate for various circumstances. Like for instance, if I have to do enormous workload in office hours, I will likely choose the second way to spend my leisure time. On the other hand, providing that my job is not much uptight, I may challenge my friend to play puzzle or find a peaceful place read some books.

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Nowadays, with busy lifestyles, there is little time for people to entertain themselves. Therefore, selecting what to do in one’s spare time is fairly important. Some suggest that it is better to do activities that boost the mind like reading and solving word puzzles, whereas, in contrast, others want to relax their brain completely in their leisure time. I will discuss both points of view.

First of all, doing mental activities is beneficial. When we read or play puzzles, our brain still works at a lower capacity in comparison with its normal status. It means that the mind in leisure and working time is not significantly different. Hence, we can retain our ability to work under pressure despite the fact that we are free for quite a while.

Nevertheless, a great number of people long for and need their brain to relax thoroughly. In weekdays, they spend eight hours per day working and the pressure of their job makes them exhausted. They are bored with mental activities as their brains are stimulated continuously in their job so they need to do something which is very different.

In conclusion, I think that one way is not better than the other way. Each one is appropriate for various circumstances. For instance, if I have an enormous workload in office hours, I will likely choose the second way to spend my leisure time. On the other hand, providing that I am not too uptight in my job, I may challenge my friends to play a puzzle or find a peaceful place to read some books.

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FURTHER COMMENTS


Writing a Conclusion

You do answer the question, however you should still make sure you have a conclusion and it is clear where it is. So you can add a ‘conclusion’ transition word in your last paragraph to do this.

Vocabulary

You have to be careful with your vocab / phrasing. You are making mistakes that will confuse your message e.g.

Prime
Boasting
Remain our adaptation
discrepant even contrast
due to two ways are appropriate
job is not much uptight

Are you trying to put in higher level vocab to boost your score? This is ok for practicing, but only use vocab in the test that you are confident you know how to use, otherwise you will make mistakes and confuse the examiner, thus lowering your score.

Some further vocabulary points:

To entertain = Definition: To receive, or provide entertainment for, guests; as, he entertains generously.

You don’t want this meaning so you must put ‘themselves’ after it i.e. 'entertain themselves."

Complex Sentences

‘whereas’ makes a complex sentence – it must be joined with the clause before (put a comma before it, not a full stop).

Some suggest that it is better to do activities that boost the mind like reading and solving word puzzles, whereas, in contrast, others want to relax their brain completely in their leisure time.

Despite the fact that + sentence (i.e. subject verb)
Despite + noun
We can retain our ability to work under pressure despite the fact that we are free for quite a while.

How to Improve

You can see though, once your grammar / vocab errors have been corrected, your overall answer and organization looks quite good.

So you need to focus on improving your grammar and lexis/vocab (though you do have some good grammar and vocab in your essay too).

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Comments for Task 2: Use of Leisure Time

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Feb 08, 2015
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by: abdur rahim kutubi

Over the few decades with the influence of technology and science, some choices and leisure activities are transforming into modern and affecting our lives in different ways. While technology is convincing people’s lives around the world, it is true that some traditional cultures become popular individually. I agree with this topic equally.

It is fact that computer and internet are generating verities of new ideas and games to provide people for leisure activity who are adopting and changing as their tastes. In previous time people who would enjoyed playing computer games very much, nowadays, are turning their opinions into internet video conference and live games from different countries as better option. Secondly, latest technology makes people fascinate and persuades them to accept new inventions to keep pace with modern world. The electronic toys which were not available in the past helped the children to be creative and brainchild that were important to expedite the psycho-socio development for them. Thirdly, to promote the socio economic cultural development, technological improvement on social activity should be mandatory rather than the individual choice on pastime works. The more update in hobbies and tastes people would like to accept, the more cultural progress we could expect in our country.

The conventional hobbies, however, should be given priority to retain our previous tradition that would play great role to be innovative because it means that it upholds our identity of everyday activity. For example, lone tennis might not be disappeared because individual-liking would grasp this game for personal purpose that provides players to be efficient and confident mentally and physically. Moreover, traditional leisure works make people to produce new ideas and popularity that help to hasten the overall development. Besides, as it is played internationally, such type of activity has more significant than others.

In recapitulation, I think that while new invention of science compels us to adopt modern culture, traditional activity has equal important role in our society.
May 06, 2015
 My Use of Leisure Time Essay
by: Anonymous

Leisure time should be spent in the manner which is morally acceptable and also in a manner which interests the individual. Every individual has its own inclinations, ideas and personal preferences. To assert that the leisure time should be spent in one way only would not be suitable at all. Leisure time is meant to give respite to the individuals from their hectic lifestyles and jobs, the individual can decide the manner which is most suitable according to his preferences so that he could derive the required benefit from it.

Many prefer to spend their leisure time pursuing more intellectual interests. Reading books, solving puzzles, watching informative documentaries etc, others would prefer to spend it resting or globe trotting. Some would indulge in sports to clear their minds and exercise which a person could be deprived of, crammed behind the work desk.

Those who indulge in honing their intellectual skills will find that it will help in progressing in their career, and will result in accolade from fellow colleagues and friends. others who spend it resting will benefit from it as well if they have had a rough time working, it will give them the peace of mind necessary to preserve pleasant mood and sanity. However, one should try to strike a balance between rest, travel and intellectual pursuits; that would be leisure time well spent.
Sep 14, 2015
 how to spend leisure time
by: Anonymous

We can spend our leisure time by doing these types of activities on internet..
We can spend our time on our hobbies or whatever we like to do...
Always do that what u like to do..listen to your heart and soul that whatever u want to do..
We can also chat with our friends on internet. With this we can fell good or we can also do some other activities on our mobile such as we can play on mobile or our PC which is very relaxable...
Soooo with my opinion we should have to do just that which makes us happy or relax...
Feb 18, 2016
 use of leisure time
by: Anonymous

Nowadays people are overwhelmed with the busy life so they need time to relax. If we don't get time for leisure, it effects our health very badly. Leisure time has lots of benefit but I am going to discuss few. Firstly if people opt to go gym by joining a gym they will be physically fit. Even though some are busy in their family life but if they do chatting with their friends they can be socially connected.
In essence leisure time is important for every body as it balances our life.
Feb 23, 2016
 Leisure time
by: HPSSandhu ( MA, P.hd)

Hi all,

Some think that putting flamboyant words or using catchy idioms and phrases can get you more bands.

It is a wrong conception rather it can lower your scores as one misfit word, phrase or idiom will spoil the whole show.

Use simple, flawless sentences without making any spelling mistake (extremly dangerous) - you can come out with flying colours. One wrong move can spoil the beauty of your writing so be careful.

Spend even 10 minuits to plan your essay, that will be the best utilization of the time not a wastage. Good luck
Jul 22, 2016
 Please rectify it
by: Madan

Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.

In modern era, people are too busy in there routine, don't have so much time for own health. However, to improve the health and working capacity needs to schedule free time.

It is frequently believe that, to use spare time people should do some activities like reading the books or solve puzzles for improve the mind. Partially I am in the favour of this statement. However, I also believe that to entertainment facilities such watching TV or Shopping play a significant role to rest the mind.

Nevertheless, it's depends on the individual interest and occupation because nobody can force to others, how they should spend there leisure time. Few people have office job or may be others have physically stressful job.

Thus, who have office job they feels more relax to do physical exercise like yoga, Swimming, running or walking in fresh air, because they have to spend most of the time during working hours in a cabin with burden of paper and computer work.

However, others have physically demanding job such as waiter, engineer, doctor or in marketing field. In these type of profession may be nobody will be able to do running after work shift. So especially these category folks prefer few entertainment activities like watching movies, browsing Internet or take a nap.

To conclude, health play a Vital role in life. Individual determine that how they love to enhance there health according to own responsibility and Interest to get rid from everyday stress and to be healthy.
Dec 21, 2016
 My task - Use of Leisure Time
by: Anonymous

Leisure time is free time spent away from other responsibilities such as business, job, domestic chores or education. This is a unique moment for us and, while some people think they can boost their mindset by using this time to do some fun activities, I firmly believe that by giving our mind rest we can help enhance them too. And any kind of leisure time activities are necessary for human body physically and spiritually.

On one hand, it is said that people should work on words puzzles or read books or learn a new language perpetually in order to improve their mind capabilities. By doing these things, the mind starts to think deeply and solve the given problems. For example, when a human read a book he/she acquires more vocabulary and this can enhance the mind’s ability to retain words and can help prevent some mind diseases such as Alzheimer's.

Another noticeable option for leisure time is doing some specific recreational activity such as bird watching or fishing in order to let the mind to take time to refresh even by sleeping. Not devoting enough attention to rest and sleeping will make us exhausted and irritable and the quality of our work will decrease. Above all the propensity for violence comes from the lack of resting. A new study suggests that sleep problem plays far greater role in aggression than any previous research suspected.

In conclusion, mankind needs a range of recreational activities from watching the birds to climbing mountain but all should be in balance.

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