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Global Environmental Damage

by johnson
(MALAYSIA)

Reducing global environmental damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals.


To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The damage to the environment is increasing at an alarming rate mainly due to human activities. Even though a great deal of effort is being now made by governments all over the world, individuals also have a major role to play in the minimizing global environmental hazard.

To begin with, one of the major reasons for the pollution of the environment is the uncontrolled use of automobiles. If individuals can make a conscious effort to change their lifestyle, by cutting down the use of private cars and use public transport, it would substantially reduce the burning of fossil fuels. In other words, serious attempt could be made by individuals to travel to work regularly by buses and trains, which are cheap and abundant. Hence, Individual perceptive towards using these transports could help in the reduction of emissions produced by vehicles, and there by playing a vital role in addressing this issue.

In addition to this, individual could play a significant role towards safety our environment by not using enormous amount of plastic in daily life, which is a hazardous pollutant of the soil. In other words, almost every consumer use plastics while doing shopping, and there is always use and throw culture. Instead of using this, Individuals efforts could be taken into account opting for eco friendly substitutes. For example, people can use paper and cloth bags instead of plastic in supermarkets. So, use of plastics on the environment is devastating, and must find alternatives to plastic from the individual perceptive.

In conclusion, it seems to me that environmental problem is the worrying concern and individuals have a crucial role in joining hands with the government in reducing the harm caused to the environment. Lack of individual participation could mean that addressing environmental issue is beyond reach.

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The damage to the environment is increasing at an alarming rate mainly due to human activities. Even though a great deal of effort is being now now being made by governments all over the world, individuals also have a major role to play in the minimizing global environmental hazards.

To begin with, one of the major reasons for the pollution of the environment is the uncontrolled use of automobiles. If individuals can make a conscious effort to change their lifestyle, by cutting down the use of private cars and using public transport, it would substantially reduce the burning of fossil fuels. In other words, serious attempts could be made by individuals to travel to work regularly by buses and trains, which are cheap and abundant. Hence, individual perceptions towards using these types of transport could help in the reduction of emissions
produced by vehicles, and thereby play a vital role in addressing this issue.

(I think you spend too much of this paragraph explaining this one point - for example, this last point in italics is really just saying what you have already said. It is good to fully explain things as you have done, but don't overdo it).

In addition to this, individuals could play a significant role towards safety our environment making our environment safer by not using enormous amounts of plastic in daily life, which is a hazardous pollutant of the soil. In other words, For example, almost every consumer uses plastics while doing shopping, and there is always a 'use and throw away' culture. Instead of using doing this, individuals efforts could be taken into account opting (not sure what you mean here) could opt for eco friendly substitutes For example, people can use (grammar ok here but 'for example' twice would look odd) such as using paper and cloth bags instead of plastic in supermarkets. So, use of plastics on the environment is devastating, and people must find alternatives to plastic from the individual perceptive (again, not sure what you mean here).

(With this bit in italics you are again repeating what you have already said)

In conclusion, it seems to me that environmental problems are a is the worrying concern and individuals have a crucial role in joining hands with the government in reducing the harm caused to the environment. Lack of individual participation could mean that addressing environmental issue is beyond reach.

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FURTHER COMMENTS


It is a good answer as you address the question (*though not fully - see updated comments below for December), you have some good use of vocabulary and grammar, and you explain things.

But as I said above, don't go over each point too much. You could have probably included one more idea to support your argument rather than going over each point too much. This would have made your argument stronger.

Vocabulary

In other words = careful how you use this. It is used to repeat the same thing that has just been said but in different words. In the second case you are not repeating the same thing but giving more detail, or an example.

individual perceptions = I am not sure what you mean when you say this. What you say in your essay doesn't seem to be anything to do with people's 'perceptions', it is their 'actions'.

Parallelism

...by cutting down the use of private cars and use public transport...

...could help in the reduction of emissions produced by vehicles, and there by playing...

Keep structures parallel. In the first one, 'use' should also be a gerund as 'cutting' is. And in the second one 'help' is an infinitive so 'playing' should be as well.

Thanks

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Global Environmental Damage

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Apr 21, 2012
 Environmental Damage
by: Johnson

Now it is good essay should I have to add some points

It is true that the damage to the environment is increasing at an alarming rate mainly due to human activities. Even though a great deal of effort is now being made by governments all over the world, individuals also have a major role to play in minimizing global environmental hazards.

To begin with, one of the major reasons for the pollution of the environment is the uncontrolled use of automobiles. If individuals can make a conscious effort to change their lifestyle, by cutting down the use of private cars and using public transport, it would substantially reduce the burning of fossil fuels. In other words, serious attempts could be made by individuals to travel to work regularly by buses and trains, which are cheap and abundant.

In addition to this, individuals could play a significant role towards making our environment safer by not using enormous amounts of plastic in daily life, which is a hazardous pollutant of the soil. For example, almost every consumer uses plastics while shopping, and there is always a 'use and throw away' culture. Instead of doing this, individuals could opt for eco friendly substitutes such as using paper and cloth bags instead of plastic in supermarkets.

In conclusion, it seems to me that environmental problems are a worrying concern and individuals have a crucial role in joining hands with the government in reducing the harm caused to the environment. Lack of individual participation could mean that addressing environmental issue is beyond reach.
Apr 21, 2012
 Environmental Damage Essay
by: IELTS buddy

Hi,

It is now 247 words so it is too short. So yes, you would need to add another supporting point.

Thanks
Jul 09, 2012
 Globalisation impacts negatively on developing countries. Do you agree or disagree?
by: Anonymous

Globalisation is an inevitable process that helps nations around the world become more and more connected. It simply means that the world has become more integrated economically, socially, politically and culturally through the advances of technology, transportation and communication. Many people assume that developing countries will benefit from this process, however, far from having a positive influence, underdeveloped nations have been affected negatively in term of economy and culture.

Firstly, a significant drawback of globalisation is that the economies of developing countries are negatively affected by the competition between multinationals and local companies. With abandunt capital and modern technologies, international companies often fix prices lower than rivals’ in order to penetrate, stabilize and expand the consume market. Therefore, domestic customers tend to buy more of their products. As a result, local firms may lose market share and be bankrupted which can lead to the economies of developing countries becoming weak and unstable.

Another negative impact of globalisation is that sometimes the cultures of underdeveloped countries are negatively affected by films and music which are introduced from developed countries through globalisation. A good example of this is Vietnam’s culture that , which is negatively affected by music and movies imported from America, Korea and China. People often prefer foreign films and music instead of its own nations. Hence, movies and music of the poor countries seem difficult to develop which may lead to loss of the traditional values.

In conclusion, althought although most countries in the world can’t deny the benefit of globalisation, it is still clear that this process impacts negatively on the economies and culture of developing countries through competition with domestic companies and harming cultures in the form of films and music. Therefore, the government of developing countries should control and monitor the globalisation by effective policies which are appropriate with for every aspect of their countries.
Jul 11, 2012
 Globalisation impacts negatively on developing countries. Do you agree or disagree?
by: IELTS buddy

Its a very good answer, with just a few errors.
Dec 26, 2012
 Missing an idea
by: Anonymous

Please correct me if I'm wrong. According to his thesis statement in the introduction, he didn't discuss the second point which is the role of the government. Otherwise, he has reconsider the introduction. But the ideas are very good
Thanks for this site. Appreciated efforts
Dec 31, 2012
 Thesis Statement
by: ielts buddy

Hi,

I haven't looked at this question for a while, but upon looking at it again I think you are right.

The thesis statement says that the government is doing many things so in the essay it would be better to state briefly what these things are and to say why individuals would be more suited to tackle the problems.

The question is specifically asking WHO is best suited to deal with the problems - the Government or Individuals. So the thesis should state clearly who is best to deal with it and then explain why.
Jan 12, 2013
 Reducing global environmental damage
by: len

Global warming is one of the major problems of every country due to different human activities causing huge damage to our mother nature. Although, the government plays a big role in minimizing environmental damage everyone must show concern in this situation to have a better solution.

To begin with, one of the major reasons for the pollution of the environment is improper garbage disposal. If individuals are aware of proper segregating of garbage this will lessen toxic problem. Japan is one classic example the Japanese people are well disciplined in terms of segregating their waste product and their government set schedules in collecting their waste disposal. In addition cutting down the use of private cars instead use of a bicycle for transportation, it would reduce the use of gasoline causing air pollution. And use of bicycle going to work serve as a healthy exercise in our everyday routine will decrease the risk of obesity. As a result the government will have enough funds for preventing environmental damage because the risk for obesity was reduced.

Furthermore, instead of cutting off trees used for building houses and furniture use other material like cement in building home or using glass for making furnitures. This will minimize destroying our mountains.

In conclusion, showing concerns in our environment will help our future children to experience the magic beauty of nature and this will be more effective if all individuals will help government in reducing global environmental problems.


Aug 22, 2013
 Why Our Environment Polluted
by: Anonymous

I Think,Pollution is increasing day by day. There are lot of reason behind this.

Firstly we can say that The automobiles Are increasing on the roads .these all are produced lot of dangerous gases which pollute our environment.and people get a lot of diseases from air.

secondly our industries have a big role in environment .some chemical are produced by industries which are mixing in our rivers and people use the river water for drinking,bathing and some other places in this way chemical are entered in human body . this is also main reason of diseases.

Thirdly the unwanted uses of plastic like as plastic polythene . every day we go to market for shopping. shopkeepers give us all material in plastic polythene.after use of plastic we put it in open area .in this way we are polluted our environment.

if we want to clean our environment we should try to use of paper and cloth bag.our government should try to bann on plastic, try to control on traffic and stopped the unwanted vehicles. government should try to stricket rules against industry list so that we can control all things which polluted our environment
Sep 11, 2013
 Tradional VS International Music
by: Niner X

There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

You should write at least 250 words.

Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples
and relevant evidence.
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Since time immemorial, prolific kinds and classifications of music can be listened to and enjoyed worldwide, making it as an essential piece-of-art which conveys emotions and entertainment among diverse age groups of different races. While some people enjoy listening to international types of melodies, many still prefer to stick to traditional tunes, which originated from their own nations. This essay will compare the level of importance of traditional music versus the tunes played by international artists.

Along with the modernization in technology, the new generation of singers and artists were able to compose highly technical types of music as rock, jazz and ballads, which are accompanied by high notes and loud backgrounds. While most of the listeners can enjoy those novice types of entertainment, some of the compositions may bear languages that could be hard to understand for some audience with less knowledge on that specific piece. Nevertheless, foreign music is important to be shared since it imparts some bits of information that could possibly be unknown to other nationals outside their country.

Upon the other hand, I strongly concur that traditional types of music is more vital to be treasured and nurtured more than the international ones for various grounds. Firstly, original classic melodies speak most of the nation’s history and way of living in the remote and recent past. Secondly, those types of compositions encompass languages that are easily understood by ordinary people, thus, they can able to relate to them with ease and less hassle. Lastly, those pieces play a great role for the preservation of art and culture of the country where it started off.

On balance, abundance of music genre, in the national and international setting is greatly observable in the present times. Indeed, music is important for the lives of the people across the lifespan, and local and foreign types of which could actually coexist, although, national classic tunes pose a greater importance than international ones for the perpetuation of history, culture and arts of a country.
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35 minutes.
Jan 14, 2014
 SOS
by: Anonymous

Hi) Can you help me to write essay. And can you check me essay?
Feb 01, 2014
 IELTS written
by: Alda

What can I do if I don't have any idea about it?
Jun 18, 2014
 plz tell me where we can use govt should do this or that?
by: raavi

plz tell me where we can use govt should do this or that?
Jan 16, 2015
 task ??
by: Anonymous

Hi
Can anyone help me??
The task is wether to agree that government or individuals be responsible to reduce the problem and why, is not it??
As i see the sample answer discuss the measures to reduce it. I am confused if i understand the task or not !!

Thank you
Jun 12, 2015
 Environment
by: Anonymous

We should protect our environment.
Aug 16, 2015
 A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their
by: Manan

As far as the animals concerned , a lots of things which i want to add in this essay . So many people think that animals are niether be account for the research or as a food nor be exploited for the humans.Where as others argue that use of the animals as an food or doing experiment on it is necessary. But i totally exaggerate skeptics who are in favour of require same rights for the animals as humans.

I would like to commance with the point in advocate of use of animals as a food and other facilities. In last few decades , there are gargantuan growths measured in human population. Due to that needs of the foods and other accommodations also hike. For example, nowadays due to increasing different dieses need of the medicines are gain for this reason experiments conducted so used animals as this purpose here.

In addition, for instant research it was proved that one of the largest portion of the world's population rely on the animal's meat.In many villages animals are use as a travelling purpose.So it is not possible at all to have a same rules and acts for the animals as human beings.

By conglomerating all the points which I discussed in above paragraphs ,human bieng is the suprime social animal so it is not a big issue if animals are bieng a food or used for travelling , entertainment and doing some research in drugs which probably used for the human dieses.
Sep 21, 2015
 Pollution and damage to the environment
by: Anonymous

Could you correct my text please? Thanks!

The pollution and the damage to the environment are caused by human activities like the industrialization, urbanization, consumption of fossile fuels, transportation, tourism, etc.

However, there are many people that are working a lot to repair the environment.
For instance, some people go by bicycle or public transport instead of by car. Also, there are people who recycle paper, plastic, glass and toxic materials for nature. Other people are scientists that investigate about electrical transport and natural sources of energy like wind power or solar power.

On the other hand, there are many organizations that do excellent work to protect the environment. For example, they fight against contamination of the rivers and seas, the climate change, deforestation, and teach people to be more respectful with nature.

To sum up, I think environmental problems can be solved thanks to the small and big actions of great people who want to preserve our planet.
Jun 26, 2016
 Environment damge
by: Bahaa Abdel Nasser

Our environment is the place where we live, the air we breathe and the water we drink. This makes it our priority to save the environment. Personally I think government have the major role in keeping the environment healthy while others belief that individuals have more vital role.

Over the time, governments have been responsible for creating laws and forcing individuals to obey them. That of course makes the government role in saving environment more effective. For example, government can save the environment by applying more strict rules on factories emissions. What is more, government can totally prevent some heavy polluting industries (like cement industry) and rely on importing instead. Government also have the right to dismantle factories and relocate them in places far away from inhabitants. Moreover, some governments apply taxes on CO2 emmissions from factories, which of course encourages those factories to reduce their CO2 emissions. Government also have the tools to get rid of solid wastes by recycling them or even burying them in far suitable places. Regarding water pollution, government can prevent it from the source, or at least it have got all the abilities and facilities to treat the water before either recycle it or dump it in the sea.

On the other hand, some people hold the belief that individuals have the major rule in keeping environment healthy. They argue that without the cooperation of the individuals with their governments in saving the environment, the government will definitely fail. In my opinion, For people to cooperate with their government, they should be aware of the importance of healthy environment. This awareness is also the government responsibility.

On the whole, Healthy environment should be our priority. Individuals should cooperate and participate in saving their environment. But government role is more effective as it have all the tools and the rules to save our environment.
Jul 09, 2016
 A Doubt
by: Anonymous

I got the same task in my ielts but i have written about poverty, corruption and unemployment thinking them to be global problems.
so i am worried a lot.

Can you please answer whether the damage can be poverty, corruption and unemployment as well ??
Jul 10, 2016
 A Doubt
by: IELTS buddy

No that is not right. Those factors you wrote about are not to do with the environment.

Unfortunately it is most likely that your score will be reduced for task response for not answering the question properly.
Jul 15, 2016
 this is how i have approached the task,could you please correct it
by: Anonymous

Environmental protection is the basic duty of everyone of us, would it be effective if the ball is given to government's cort alone?

It s certainly governments duty to make strategical plans to save our nature, however, formulated policies have to be carried out by common man in the society. For example, after banning the burning of the plastic in public place government has little thing to do, but a common man can implement it effectively. Moreover, local people better know the degree of environmental damage and they could take better measures to protect their neighborhood.

For example, recently govt proposed a plan to build a new airport in a heritage village in Kerala proposed the demolition of historical buildings and leveling of fields. People stood together inorder to protest the plan as it likely to affect their livelihood.

A further example of people's contribution on this subject, green tribunal in association with forest dept distributed 5million tree saplings in the last envmnt day through schools. It was a huge success as parents as well as local people all together pledged to plant and protect those saplings.

Summary, environmental protection is not only the duty of a few politicians but also it must be carried out by all of us.
May 22, 2017
 Reducing global environmental damage
by: Anonymous

Reducing global environmental damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The global environment is deteriorating in a large scale. Some people think that it is governments' responsibility to reduce environmental damage. I strongly agree with this to a large extent for two reasons and this essay will explain why.

Governments have a greater power than anyone else. They can use their power to impose stricter laws in order to protect the environment. In addition, they can tax more on some industry such as mining industry, which creates more harm to the environment. For example, the government can shut down those business or industry which does not comply with environmental protection regulation and also can impose a higher tariff on them. Therefore, the government can do much more than an individual to protect the environment.

The another reason why I am with the viewpoint that governments should be responsible for handling environmental damage is that governments have a budget to educate people about its long-term impacts. Governments can also campaign on the devastating outcomes of environmental damage. For instance, in many countries governments are putting educational advertisements on television and radio to create awareness of environmental damage amongst the citizens. This can potentially reduce environmental damage. Thus, governments can increase awareness in order to cope with the environmental damage.

In conclusion, the global environmental problem is the biggest problem in modern world. It has been thought that governments should intervene to handle this issue. In my opinion, taking the responsibility of protecting the global environment by the government is a viable solution as they not only have an ultimate power to impose tougher rules and regulations but also have an ability to educate people through campaign and advertisements.

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