Great vocabulary.
Your ideas should be more developed. This is more like a list of reasons without explanations which could hurt your band score.
Grammar goes wrong sometimes, only in present tense.
Your vocab could help you get an 8.5 or more but it is more like a 7 or 7.5 to me
IELTS is a registered trademark of University of Cambridge, the British Council, and IDP Education Australia. This site and its owners are not affiliated, approved or endorsed by the University of Cambridge ESOL, the British Council, and IDP Education Australia.